i wrote this when i was a little bit angry... just a little... let me emphasize on the "little"...
ok... and when you read this, just keep in mind that it is about no one... the characters do not exists... the "i" is definitely not me and the "you" refers to no one in particular...
you see... when i write these poems/articles... i like to take my feelings at that particular moment and magnify it by 10... or maybe 100... so some might find my writings a bit to extreme but i say it gives my writings more emotion... you've got your way, i've got mine...
now, what i need to complete this article/ poem... is a title... i just can't figure out one that is suitable...
and probably some comments from anyone... i dun think this piece is good... just i haven't written in a while... so... comments ok? anything... just leave it here...
I love you, more than anything
I hate you, almost just as much
What am I to do with you?
How do I love and not hate?
I hate you, almost just as much
What am I to do with you?
How do I love and not hate?
Stop messing with me and love me
Stop being a person and be my love
Stop caring about anything but us
Stop being an individual but a partner
Sacrifices has to be made
Sacrifices do not hurt
Sacrifices are voluntary actions
Sacrifices are our bond
I will not cross the barren desert
I will not climb the highest mountain
I will not walk through the fires of hell
I will change myself for you
I will not endure all those torture
Not because I am not willing to
But I know you will not allow it
You will not force me through pain
I have faith in you
I need the faith repaid
I have trust in you
I need the trust repaid
I love you, more than anything
I will continue to love you
Yes that I will do, yes
Love without consequences
5 comments:
nic, it's a nice piece...
i don't sense the anger in it, but rather a deep inner frustration, not at "her"/"him" but at yourself and your predicament. in fact, for all we know, you adopted the third person view..hence "i" is not you, but you are "he/she". :)
ANyway, you got it right on the last line
love should be without consequences.
like mr tomato said, i didn't feel much anger from this so called "art piece" too. But, from my personal point of view, I don't like writing that is so strong/extreme/harsh word. I prefer some "soft" writing.
kam - thanks for the comment. rarely do someone actually get that much out of my writing... ppl usually read it and go "hmmm..." and that's it... so i really do appreciate it when i read comments like yours.
liu - for the record, i've never referred to any of my writing as an "art piece". and like i've explained, when i write, it will be based on my feelings (usually negative) and it will be magnified and exaggerated. so for me to write something "soft", it has to be a positive feeling and these feelings work in the oppposite ways compared to the negative ones... meaning i've got to be ecstatically happy or maybe "high"... hahaha...
hey nic...keep them coming.
btw..u don't need to ask fro a title, u already have a title...the last line :)
hey... that's not bad...
"Love without consequences"
not bad... =)
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